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Name: Jonathan Lucano.

Course: Advanced Reading and Writing 2.

Teacher: Omar Jiménez.

Schedule: 19:30 – 21:00 hours.

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1st Official Writing Activity

My life in this future My life in 2175 is awesome, in my large 181 years old I can say that I have fulfilled all my dreams. It has been possible due to the multiple experiences that have helped me to develop different skills during my life. Living for 181 years have permitted me to study all the theory of modern electricity that I’m fond of utterly and to make an important contribution to the entire world, I made the decision of this plan the first day in the university. That day I was walking for the passageways thinking if I really chose a good first career, the dark sky on my head was telling me that it could be a big storm, but suddenly i stopped one meter away from the door of a classroom of senior students and saw a special image, an old professor but with vigorous eyes was talking in an empathic and worrisome way about electric transmission without feeders with hope and passion because as he said it could change all the systems in the planet in the future. That scene was very significant to me. For that reason, I decided to study all the topics in theory of electricity to achieve this technological development and after 120 years of hard studies I have made it possible to all the world. I have created this new kind of transmission and nowadays it is positive in the economy of countries because of the economic aspects that this technology has saving money in no buying feeders and substations. I think that because of the large life that a human has nowadays in 2175 is possible to continue developing theories and creating new technologies. All these goals are positive to human race. Layout: - Correctly done Content: - Wrong thesis statement and re-statement of thesis. The phrase “My life in 2175 is awesome”, if it is your thesis, is in the wrong position. It should be at the end of the Introduction Paragraph. The Conclusion paragraph first sentence is definitely not a re-statement of how happy you are. Be careful, these are the two most important sentences of the whole essay, they must be perfect. - Wrong Introduction Paragraph: it should be a short story or interesting anecdote. This is way too short. - Wrong Conclusion Paragraph: review the “final thoughts” that you can add there, please. You included none. - Wrong topic sentence in your Body Paragraph. There is no clear expression of what aspect of your life is so wonderful. It can be inferred, somewhat, that you refer to your studies or career, but it is not clearly stated. You have to say it very explicitly. - No sufficient usage of descriptive language: no strong imagery, no sensory details mostly. Only one example of figurative language (one personification), no similes or metaphors. These are very serious mistakes. Please, make sure to improve on them for the future! Score: 2p

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2nd Official Writing Activity

Mandatory Volunteering Have you ever thought whether mandatory volunteering is a good way to bring skills and maturity to young students? Many psychologists and researchers confirm that mandatory volunteering is the better way to focalize and discover the personality of a student before to involved into the society. Mandatory must be and is an effective model to form young students. First of all, doing mandatory volunteering, a good proposal in schools, gives to the students a big sense of humanity and social mature. It’s a fact that students in the last semesters are deciding what they will study in the near future, so it’s important give them a sense of contribution to the society behind of this decision. Despite of the fact that many students want to waste their time in other activities like sports or music, a recent study concluded, that students that makes other activities in parallel with mandatory volunteering have more success on their grades. When I was in school, I used to be opposed to mandatory volunteering because I preferred to play videogames, over the years I could realize that volunteering would have be a better activity to invest my time because I could have helped people. Another important point is that mandatory volunteering permits to develop the emotional part of humans. A lot of senior students in school are very shy and impatient, and doing mandatory volunteering they will feel determined and inspired to spread their emotional intelligence. Although some students are good in science and math and ignore that their emotional intelligence is low, the reality is that they need to socialize to the competitive world and become leaders in the society using their emotional maturity to get success. In my personal experience I lost my fears doing mandatory volunteering because it taught me to socialize with different kind of people. I impulse people to support mandatory volunteering in the schools for senior students because it has many benefits like teaching new skills, socializing and creating links between the society and the students, we will have better persons including this in all school of the world. Do you agree with a better world for us? 

Extra writing activity: A 2-paragraph writing on “How have you liked the writing course so far? How does it compare with your expectations? What have you learned and what would you still like to learn?”

The writing course was very interesting this month to me because I could find an effective form to redact an essay, it is a skill very important to my job. Last month I did not understand how to write an essay in a 100% way, my expectation was about to clear these doubts and to find a final way to write, so it was excellent. This month, I have learned about the layout of an essay, how to make concessions between arguments and how to make persuasive essays and I would like to know more about other structures and skills to make strong paragraphs like technical reports for example.

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The exercises from the NorthStarLab webtool that were assigned by the teacher, duly completed and showing the score (a minimum of 80% correct answers).

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The vocabulary homework presented during the month and signed by the teacher. Every correction should be done on an extra page.

HOMEWORK : Vocabulary Unit 5 Complete the chart with synonyms from Reading One (R1) and Reading Two (R2) that have suffixes listed. Then think of your own example of an adjective with the same suffix. DEATH DO US PART (R1)

SUFFIXES Paragraphs 1–2 -ing -ive Paragraphs 3–5 -able -al Paragraphs 6–15 -ent -ous Paragraphs 26–33 -ible -ic Paragraphs 34–38 -y

EXAMPLE FROM TEXT   shimmering impulsive   insufferable ideal   Ancient serious   permissible romantic   misty

DEFINITION OR SYNONYM   sparkling impetuous   intolerable perfect   very old sincere   allowable passionate   foggy

EXAMPLE OF A NEW ADJECTIVE WITH THE SAME SUFFIX   speeding active   flammable universal   independent nervous   discernible scientific   dirty

TOWARD IMMORTALITY (R2)

SUFFIXES Paragraphs 1–2 -al Paragraphs 3–4 -ic -ical Paragraphs 5–7 -less -ing Paragraphs 10–13 -ly -ed -some -ant -ful  GOOD WORK!

EXAMPLE FROM TEXT   personal   emphatic practical   loveless remaining   inevitably limited worrisome constant youthful

1st Official Writing Activity correction

DEFINITION OR SYNONYM   individual   forceful sensible   without love still left   without doubt restricted troublesome steady young

EXAMPLE OF A NEW ADJECTIVE WITH THE SAME SUFFIX   regional   basic logical   homeless fascinating   orderly alarmed devilsome important awful

My life in this future In my large 181 years old I can say that I have fulfilled all my dreams. It has been possible due to the multiple experiences that have helped me to develop different skills in my career and the large life that a human can live. I am satisfied with what has happened because I discovered a new way to transmit electric energy, so my life in 2175 is truly awesome. Living for 181 years have permitted me to study all the theory of modern electricity that I’m fond of utterly and to make an important contribution to the entire world, I made the decision of this plan the first day in the university. That day I was walking for the passageways thinking if I really chose a good first career, my doubts were like snow ball falling in the mountain and the dark sky on my head was telling me that it could be a big storm, but suddenly I stopped one meter away from the door of a classroom of senior students and saw a special image, an old professor but with vigorous eyes was talking in an empathic and worrisome way about electric transmission without feeders with hope and passion because as he said it could change all the systems in the planet in the future. That scene was very significant to me. For that reason, I decided to study all the topics in theory of electricity to achieve this technological development, my heart was a bomb about to explode with his idea, and after 120 years of hard studies I have made it possible to all the world. I have created this new kind of transmission and nowadays it is positive in the economy of countries because of the economic aspects that this technology has saving money in no buying feeders and substations. I think that if the human being could not live so many years, I could not have achieved my happiness, it takes a long time to build big dreams, even more if is about science. Layout: - Correctly done Content: - Wrong thesis statement and re-statement of thesis. The phrase “My life in 2175 is awesome”, if it is your thesis, is in the wrong position. It should be at the end of the Introduction Paragraph. The Conclusion paragraph first sentence is definitely not a re-statement of how happy you are. Be careful, these are the two most important sentences of the whole essay, they must be perfect. - Wrong Introduction Paragraph: it should be a short story or interesting anecdote. This is way too short. - Wrong Conclusion Paragraph: review the “final thoughts” that you can add there, please. You included none. - Wrong topic sentence in your Body Paragraph. There is no clear expression of what aspect of your life is so wonderful. It can be inferred, somewhat, that you refer to your studies or career, but it is not clearly stated. You have to say it very explicitly. - No sufficient usage of descriptive language: no strong imagery, no sensory details mostly. Only one example of figurative language (one personification), no similes or metaphors. These are very serious mistakes. Please, make sure to improve on them for the future! Score: 2p