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Academic Writing Stage 4 Content, Structure and Mechanics

CHRISTIAN FABIAN QUINTERO RUEDA 1073154372 9

Tutor MILLY ANDREA MUÑOZ

UNIVERSIDAD NACIONAL ABIERTA Y A DISTANCIA. UNAD SCIENCES OF EDUCATION SCHOOL- ECEDU Bachelor of English as a foreign language May2019

In the essay, Li Xiu Ying expresses the importance that Chinese people give to their children learning English at a young age, since they believe that this knowledge will open doors for the future in which they will be able to take advantage of employment opportunities that without the use of this language they could not access. I adapted the original essay to our context here in Colombia, since here also the parents give great importance to their children from an early age to acquire a second language such as English, because they consider it as the language of the present and of the future and as that key that will open doors to labor and cultural offers that without knowing English could not have. In this practice I strengthened the use of connectors when writing my papers and knowing how to organize sentences within a paragraph; it is my task to make stronger the correct and timely use of punctuation marks to turn this weakness into a strength.

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Yes / Comments and Suggestions No

Content: What the essay says Does the paper show what the Yes title says? Does the introduction clearly explain what the paper is about? Does it prepare the reader for what comes next? Is the thesis statement clear and easy to understand?

Yes

Does each paragraph relate to the thesis statement?

Yes

Are the main ideas — topic sentences — related to the thesis statement? Do they back it up? Do the paragraphs support the thesis statement? Is the support specific? Is it convincing? Does the conclusion logically end the paper? Does it give a take-home message that stems from the rest of the paper? Structure: Does the paragraph have a topic sentence? (Not all paragraphs have a topic sentence. Sometimes the topic sentence is implied.) What is the main idea of the paragraph? (Even if the topic sentence is not explicitly written, you should be able to

Yes

Yes

It has the cohesion necessary to connect and transmit ideas. The author is very consistent with the paper. It is precise and concise; besides a clear idea of what the author wants to convey. Each paragraph explains the reasons the author has to support his thesis. The ideas are closely linked if, what strongly supports the thesis.

Yes

Yes

Efficiently, the support of each paragraph is specific and convincing to the reader. With the conclusion the author patents his thesis and gives the message to the reader to convince him about the paper.

How the essay reads I consider the Yes have a topic sentence.

Yes

paragraph

I think this is the main idea of the paragraph “[…] In China, it is important for us to learn English because if

determine the main idea based on the information given in the paragraph.) Do all the sentences in the paragraph support the main idea?

you do well in English, you can get a good job far more than non-speaking English[…]”

Yes

All sentences are linked and have an intertextuality cohesion between them giving coherence to the paper. How are the sentences in the Yes They are organized by an inclusion paragraph organized? relationship where the sentences are related so that one is adjacent to another. Is this the most effective way Yes I think so, because the sentences to organize them? Explain that are related in this way why or why not. constitute a syntactic unit in which one sentence participates in the other as an adjacent one. It will be a sentence modifier, it can also integrate phrases, to include subordinate sentences, since they integrate a larger sentence structure. It also adds that paper is organized hierarchically in a deductive way. Are there any sentences that No I believe, all sentences are don’t follow the organization organized in a logical way and or that just don’t flow follow the organization of the logically? Give examples and paper to clearly understand the explain what the problem is. author's idea. Mechanics: How the essay is written Is the spelling correct? Did Yes you use the spell check on The spelling was checked by the the computer or look up computer and it is correct words you weren’t sure about in a dictionary? Is the grammar correct? Are Yes there any sentence fragments The computer's spell checker did or run-on sentences? not correct any misspelled words or fragments

Has the author used punctuation correctly? Has the author correctly used capital letters?

Yes

Has the author used words correctly throughout the paper?

Yes

In my opinion the use punctuation marks is fine

of

Yes Effectively the use of the capital letters is correct I think the author made excellent use of the words on the whole paper.

How might this paper be improved? Why it is important to learn English at an early age? In Colombia it is increasingly important to learn English from an early age. For this reason, the interest of parents to encourage their children to become familiar with this language has increased, since they understand that the fact that they can master it will allow them to have more opportunities in their adulthood. At present, speaking English is a plus in the curriculum, this means that the chances of finding a good job are doubled by mastering a second language. The labour market is global and English is the official communication language in this environment, so learning English is essential to be competitive with other professionals. One way that children can learn English is by accustoming them to hearing words in this language, between 18 months and 6 years of age, it is the moment in which the brain is in the process of developing cognitive skills. According to experts, stimulating listening and using words in this language from an early age generates changes at the level of the cerebral cortex that facilitate learning, the most interesting is that they will learn in a natural way and similar to the mother tongue. Children exposed to English from childhood develop, in addition to a language ability superior to the rest of their age, a better ability to learn

another language, since their brain uses the same learning system used to learn English. Children's minds absorb knowledge better, as they grow up, it is more complicated to study, and children have the advantage that their neural networks are willing to know the world around them. Therefore it is advisable to learn English from an early age. Finally, once children reach youth, their priorities change and they have less time to devote to learning English. This happens when they start university, friends, parties and others that are usually aspects of daily life. For this reason, in the event that a young man decides to learn English and is not familiar with the language, one of the best ways he can do to improve his level is to study abroad.